REVISED SCENE 2:  Anakin and Padmé at Home (aka The Balcony Scene)

Introduction: Let's face facts, the dialogue in this scene is clunky.  So much so, I received complaints about it.  My goal in revising this scene was to make the dialogue more natural.  It takes place approximately 29:25 into the film.

INT. PADMÉ'S APARTMENT; NIGHT

Padmé stands out on the balcony, overlooking the calm and peaceful city.  She is brushing her hair in preparation for bed.  Anakin sits on a sofa inside the apartment.  He quietly admires his wife.  Her grace and beauty are a welcome sight after endless months of war.  She takes notice of him watching her and smiles.

PADMÉ
I've been thinking.  I'd like to have the baby

back on Naboo.  There are some secluded places

in the Lake Country where no one will find us. 

As Padmé speaks, Anakin stands and walks over to the balcony, his eyes fixated on Padmé.

PADMÉ

(continuing)
I can go there early and...  Why are you looking

at me like that?

ANAKIN
You look so beautiful.

Padmé gives Anakin "the look."

PADMÉ
I'm too tired to look beautiful.  And I'm too

worried about the baby to sleep.  There are plenty

of people who could use this child against us.  This

stupid war has brought so much chaos, so much death.

ANAKIN
Don't think that way.  Think of this baby as

something worth fighting for; a new hope for the future.

Besides, with your brains and my good looks, our baby will

probably be Chancellor some day.

Padmé laughs at the joke and shakes her head.  She looks at her husband and smiles.

PADMÉ
That's probably true.